Over, mortified, my life torn apart.
My broken glass unicorn;
We face the future forlorn.
An example of Englyn Penfyr © Gay Reiser Cannon – 10/11/2012 * All Rights Reserved
Beachanny's Texas
THE NEIGHBORHOODS OF MY MIND
Over, mortified, my life torn apart.
My broken glass unicorn;
We face the future forlorn.
An example of Englyn Penfyr © Gay Reiser Cannon – 10/11/2012 * All Rights Reserved
Beachanny's Texas 
This goes straight to my heart, Gay.
so powerful and sad. great write!
Brilliant! You nailed it, and I love the emotion in this.
at least with the unicorn you still got a bit of the magic…smiles..alone is a hard place….glass is pretty cold and fragile as well…nice job on the form gay….this was a fun one…it actually came pretty easy for me…
A little bit of reference to the “Glass Menagerie” here; started to use ‘blue’ instead and move it toward the lost “mi unicornio azul”. Went with the sadder shyness of glass.
I see the “Glass Menangerie” here and also the strict form. It is a bit like a haiku in having to capture an entirety in few words of image/emotion. (I haven’t written one yet). Here she/it is still whole, but very fragile.
Oh, I feel the sadness here! So hard to be the one left behind……
I like the use of a glass image – the transparency, fits so well to give the other lines strength of the theme … well done on the form … I’m about to place mine in linky soon. (Eek – !!)
Thanks everyone. I thought I’d look for a symbol to wrap mine around. Didn’t know if I could sustain a longer poem as many of you did. My congratulations to all of you for such diverse and delightful expressions through this form!
Glass reflects the abandoned feeling in this very well…hard…cold.
Brilliant – the symbol is brittle and the vowels are pliable – love the counterpoint
You really nailed the form and the emotions in this poem! Beautiful.
Lovely…
the loneliness and the visual fit together seamlessly…simply breath taking
Very well done!
I get this and I have been there before. Well done 🙂
The rhythm works very well here – it actually has a genuine Welsh feel – and Celtic sadness. Form somehow lends itself to sad. k.
Tennessee Williams would be proud! You relate the emotion of the tale with brevity and skill.
Ouch! A “glass unicorn”, hmm, never seen or heard of one – but I live a sheltered life. 🙂 But unicorns being rare & mythical (like “true love”) and glass being easy to break we have a precarious situation. Thanx to Kim Nelson’s hint: I was able to look up the Glass Menagerie allusion — if that was intentional.
I thought you’d praise or mock someone famous — yourself?
Interesting – images, thank you, even if sad. Best to keep stainless steel animals in your menagerie or keep glass in windows. Smile
Didn’t think we were still having to use the form for praise or satire. There are so many variations. I strayed from that usage.
The Glass Menagerie is a play by Tennessee Williams in which the sister of the protagonist, Laura, is reunited with a school mate now her brother’s friend. He breaks her rare animal in her glass menagerie – the unicorn – reducing its power and taking the magic out of her life. This is a simplistic statement and one should read the play to get the full force of the abandonment, and pain she feels. The glass unicorn itself has become a sort of literary symbol for that particular form of grief.
No, of course. I was wondering if you were using your poem to subtlety mocking yourself — thus I wrote “yourself?” Sorry for the misunderstanding.
The form helps you to concentrate on the language and so build up a more powerful poem
Very sad write–I love the brevity of it
Very nice.
I immediately thought of The Glass Menagerie…nice take on the form’)
The magical unicorn. So sad he was broken.
Sad words beautifully done.
the unicorn is such a magical creature…and you packed so much emotions in just a few lines..dunno why i missed this gay… enjoying my time here in california..unfortunately i haven’t planned texas in but i’m sure we’ll manage to meet again sometime…smiles